I would like to thank

Which of the following is correct?

1- I would like to thank the sales' department head Ahmed and his co-workers John and Adam.
2- I would like to thank the sales department, represented by its head Ahmed and his co-workers John and Adam.
3- I would like to thank the sales department, represented by his excellency Ahmed and his co-workers John and Adam.
4- I would like to thank the sales department who represented by his excellency Ahmed and his co-workers John and Adam.
5- I would like to thank the sales department that represented by his excellency Ahmed and his co-workers John and Adam.

Is represented in 2 and 3 reduced adjective clause or reduced relative clause?

Thanks.

If Ahmed is entitled to be called 'His Excellency' (click here to see who qualifies for that honorific, which should always be capitalised), he's unlikely to be head of a sales department.

Rover_KE said:

If Ahmed is entitled to be called 'His Excellency' (click here to see who qualifies for that honorific, which should always be capitalised), he's unlikely to be head of a sales department.

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Should I change the word "Excellency" to "head" ?


In Arabic, it is common to name the president of university and dean of college "His Excellency". I agree that in English it is used with high rank diplomats and with princes and kings if I am not mistaken.

I would be inclined to keep the Arabic for "His Excellency" and say it (in Arabic) before his name. If there's not a translation that really works when you change it to English, I think it would make sense to leave it as it is.

If I were giving a speech in French (for example), and I needed to introduce a British person called Sir John Smith, I would probably say "Mesdames et messieurs, je vous présente Sir John Smith, du Royaume Uni". I wouldn't try to translate "Sir" into French.