goodboybkk
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Please correct my essay and thanks in advance.
Some say that doing things together with others is better than doing it alone for essential life skills. Do you agree or disagree?
Several people believe that doing things together is more superior than alone for essential life skills however others feel otherwise. I agree with each of body of opinion.
From a global point of view, there 2 primary reasons why I strongly believe that doing things with others is more efficient in mastering essential survival skills. Perhaps the strongest of these is that you can exchange thoughts and techniques in group. For example, in martials arts class you may find a faster way to punch by looking at others doing punching and by comments and feedback from martial arts colleagues and teachers. Another compelling reason in favour of this is that in group activity you do not feel lonely, depressed and rejected. This is because you may feel supported emotionally and physically by other group participants, which in turn leads to more a enjoyable pursuit.
Despite these logically strong arguments, there is a also a case of the notion, which I agree with, that doing activity alone is better than group activity at sharping essential life skills. Probably the most compelling reason in favour of this is that you can get help from the Internet while doing martial art trainings alone. This is due to the fact that you can post online what you are doing online to get feedback from other martial arts experts who are also the Internet users. Another justification in support of this idea is that some group participants are not honestly welcoming and supporting you because of jealousy. Therefore, in that situation it is better to do acvity alone while listening music or watching Youtube to improve wellbeing.
In conclusion, upgrading essential life skills in a group or a solitary way is a topic which is somewhat relevant to modern society. I wholeheartedly believe that doing activity alone is as good as doing one in group for honing essential life skills.
Some say that doing things together with others is better than doing it alone for essential life skills. Do you agree or disagree?
Several people believe that doing things together is more superior than alone for essential life skills however others feel otherwise. I agree with each of body of opinion.
From a global point of view, there 2 primary reasons why I strongly believe that doing things with others is more efficient in mastering essential survival skills. Perhaps the strongest of these is that you can exchange thoughts and techniques in group. For example, in martials arts class you may find a faster way to punch by looking at others doing punching and by comments and feedback from martial arts colleagues and teachers. Another compelling reason in favour of this is that in group activity you do not feel lonely, depressed and rejected. This is because you may feel supported emotionally and physically by other group participants, which in turn leads to more a enjoyable pursuit.
Despite these logically strong arguments, there is a also a case of the notion, which I agree with, that doing activity alone is better than group activity at sharping essential life skills. Probably the most compelling reason in favour of this is that you can get help from the Internet while doing martial art trainings alone. This is due to the fact that you can post online what you are doing online to get feedback from other martial arts experts who are also the Internet users. Another justification in support of this idea is that some group participants are not honestly welcoming and supporting you because of jealousy. Therefore, in that situation it is better to do acvity alone while listening music or watching Youtube to improve wellbeing.
In conclusion, upgrading essential life skills in a group or a solitary way is a topic which is somewhat relevant to modern society. I wholeheartedly believe that doing activity alone is as good as doing one in group for honing essential life skills.
