Request of correction, thanks (V. Roth, Divergent)

Divergent, V. Roth, chapter 2, part 2, summary

After she drank the clear liquid, an instant has passed,
Beatrice is in an unreal world. However, she stands in
the school cafeteria again.
Behind she, around she, a woman's voice, insistently,
says "choose". After, very strange situations happen.
Two baskets appear, the woman's voice says "have it your
way", and repeat "choose".
Baskets disappear and a dog appears, Beatrice's afraid
of the dog's teeth. She runs, but dog will be faster than
she.
Beatrice has make a decision, after that the dog to
grow into a little dog. She pushes a door and she's in
a bus, all the seats are taken. Sitting near she is a
man with a newspaper, his face are scarred, seems a murder.
However Beatrice don't see well his face.
The man asks her if she know the man in newspaper photo.
Beatrice answer "nope", she lies.
She repeats herself "no real, no real, ..."

This looks like homework.

Hello Draco Malfoy, and welcome to the forum.
Is that a homework task?

Also, I note that you submitted the same thread to our Editing & Writing Topics section. In future, please don't post the same question more than once. I am closing this thread. You can post to the other one.

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